Thanks For The Love - The changing tides of love

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Full Name:             Todd                                                     

Who do you want the poem written for?: Lacie                                    

Why do you want the poem written ?: we started off as love at first sight at a party at matt's house she was dancing in front of the stero and i normally do not just walk up to someone and talk to them but i knew i had to get her number b/c she was the one for me. Tt began a little rocky at the beginning b/c she holds her friends tight. but then our love grew like i have never experinced before. it
went great for a little over a year. but my drinking and what i did while
drinking scared and hurt her very bad. She never once opened up to me and told me how she felt about it. Instead she let it build up and it tore us apart. She is a
very strong girl for not wanting to give me a second chance. She won't try it
again b/c she is afraid that i have not or will not change she does not know that
i have quit drinking. she does not want to hurt like she is now ever again. but i
promise i know i have changed, this is the one time i have lost something worth
dying over b/c of a little alcohol. and it has made me despise even wanting to
see a beer. i want her to under stand the hurting i am feeling from loosing her
over something so foolish. i am hurting very baddly not just over loosing her but
also mostly from hurting her this bad.i love this girl more than words will ever
say.....

she says she has a lot to get over and time alone is what will fix it if time
alone works at all.

Key Messages:          the butterflies i got when i was around her when our love
was young. they were so bad that it would make me feel sick and i hardly could
ever eat around her it took a while before i could.

Also the burning that went through me when we said i love you.

Also no matter what she will always be the one in my heart.

explain how things always get bad but if you love each other enough and work
through your problems together it will only make it better or always make you
stronger.

I want the chance to mend our problems by showing her the new me not by her
waiting. That seems like the only way.

Memorable Moments:     we made love for the first time at her house when she
stayed out of school on a beautiful Febuary day.

Just sitting alone together watching movies,  fooling around, and talking.

we were in the mountains and went ice skating at Ober Gatlinburg.

the night i told her that i love her late one night on the phone. we both would
not get off of it til' i finally said it.

Other Comments:        I want the chance to mend our problems by showing her the new me not by her waiting. That seems like the only way.

Style:                 sad (or maybe sad at first then go to the happy times.)  

Package Type:          Deluxe    
                                               
 

This was the first draft:

Another Start
 
There are certain times in life,
when you wish that the clocks went both ways,
because then you could turn them back,
and erase some of the more regrettable days.
 
And that's exactly the way that I feel,
I know I've been stupid and that I've done wrong,
but now I've found a different hymn-sheet,
at last, I'm starting to sing a different song.
 
Because the old lyrics weren't going anywhere,
and I knew that they'd take me down the drain,
and I knew that if I'd kept on drinking,
then I'd be drinking again and again.
 
So, I've decided to stop. Full stop.
Stop - just like that,
I was tired of feeling stupid,
in truth, I was tired of being a twat.
 
So today is the first day of the rest of my life,
and now all that's left is to repair what's undone,
because I need your sunshine in my life,
in every way, you are my morning sun.
 
For me, it was truly love at first sight,
but I guess this should come as no surprise,
but I knew that I'd fallen for you,
the very first time I looked into your eyes.
 
And we were a little rocky at first,
but then our love grew like a rampant force,
and it went great for a little over a year,
but then I had to go and spoil it (of course).
 
I know you got scared when I was drinking,
and I also know that I hurt you very bad,
and all I know is that I miss you so,
and all I know is that I feel really sad.
 
You never opened up and told me how you felt,
instead, you bottled it all up inside,
and now your strength wont give me a second chance,
after all, a girl does have her pride.
 
But all I ask for is that second chance,
I promise another drop will not pass my lips,
because I now know that drink is a torpedo,
a torpedo that will sink even the best of ships.
 
I remember the butterflies I felt when we first met,
they were so bad I found it hard to eat,
and now those butterflies have all but flown,
they've been forced to beat a hasty retreat.
 
And sometimes you just need to trust,
you need to trust in me, trust in our love,
because I know I've learned the error of my ways,
and now I'm praying to the heavens above.
 
Because I know I've lost something worth dying for,
and no matter what, you'll always be in my heart,
so Lacie, how about weaving some magic?
How about giving this boy another start?
 
Copyright Allen Jesson :) 2003
 
 And then things changed somewhat:
 
"Hey Allen, a few things have changed since we last talked. If it is not to much trouble I would like to change the poem a little. We are already giving the relationship another chance. So if it is not to much to ask I would like to take out the part where you talk about giving me another chance and maybe give thanks to her for the chance she has giving me and love she has giving me. (But she wants to take it very slow cause she thinks that if we get serious again I will go back to my old bad habits.) I want the new poem to explain how I love her with out my pride meaning I love her for her not what she is but who she is. I love her unconditionally.
I have recently rededicated my life to God and she knows all of this but it my help you out. There were hundreds of people who came to shake my hand as I stood up front and they were all crying even men. Almost all of them said that they had been praying for me for a long, long time. So that means that there were thousands of unanswered prayers for probably 5 years as I took the wrong path in life. Now all of those prayers have been answered because she led me to the right path by showing me that drinking was tearing my life apart. I had never noticed that till I lost her for that short time. Most of all she answered My Parents prayers (along w/ my prayers also) they are so grateful that I met her. And really like her a lot!!!! I truly believe that she is an Angel from God. I never thought in a million years that this would have happened it is like a miracle that I met her. She is an Angel to me. I want her to know that the path that she led me to is so much better than the one I was
I love this girl so much!!!        Thank You-Todd

I really do like the poem so far!!!!"

So, this was the second draft:

Thanks For The Love
 
There are certain times in life,
when you wish that the clocks went both ways,
because then you could turn them back,
and erase some of the more regrettable days.
 
And that's exactly the way that I felt,
I know now that I'd been stupid and that I'd done wrong,
but now I've found a different hymn-sheet,
at last, I'm starting to sing a different song.
 
Because the old lyrics weren't going anywhere,
and I knew that they'd take me down the drain,
and I knew that if I'd kept on drinking,
then I'd be drinking again and again.
 
So, I've decided to stop. Full stop.
Stop - just like that,
I was tired of feeling stupid,
in truth, I was tired of being a twat.
 
So today is the first day of the rest of my life,
and now all that's left is to repair what's undone,
because I need your sunshine in my life,
in every way, you are my morning sun.
 
For me, it was truly love at first sight,
but I guess this should come as no surprise,
but I knew that I'd fallen for you,
the very first time I looked into your eyes.
 
And we were a little rocky at first,
but then our love grew like a rampant force,
and it went great for a little over a year,
but then I had to go and spoil it (of course).
 
I know you got scared when I was drinking,
and I also know that I hurt you very bad,
and all I know is that I missed you so,
and all I know is that I felt really sad.
 
You never opened up and told me how you felt,
instead, you bottled it all up inside,
and now your strength has given me a second chance,
and together in life we'll walk, side by side.
 
And I'd like to thank you for your love,
I promise another drop will not pass my lips,
because I now know that drink is a torpedo,
a torpedo that will sink even the best of ships.
 
And I know you want to take it slowly,
and this of course, I totally understand,
just know I wont go back to my old habits,
because one day, I'm going to ask for your hand.
 
On the day I rededicated myself to God,
my unanswered prayers all got answered at the same time,
I'm so grateful to you for putting me on the right path,
because of you, I've finally got my words to rhyme.
 
And you truly are my angel from God,
you must have been born in the heavens above,
and I'd like to thank The Lord for lending you,
but most of all, I'd like to thank you for your love.
 
Because I know I'd lost something worth dying for,
and no matter what, you'll always be in my heart,
so Lacie, thank you for weaving your magic.
Thanks for giving this boy another start.
 
Copyright Allen Jesson :) 2003
 
"Hey Allen,
    
     This poem is perfect I would not want to change a single word!!!! You did an outstanding job thank you for taking the time with it. I know there was a lot of info with it and a good bit of change in my story was made but you really did satisfy me!!!
 
P.S. You can put my story on your
     website if you would like to.           
                                              Thanks A Lot,
                                               Todd Price"